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The Testament Of Solomon

“As time passed, king Solomon became corrupted. He grew lustful and hedonistic and thus fell from grace with Yah-weh. He began sacrificing to the gods of his foreign born wives. Solomon repented, but it was too late...”

 

 

 

Inside Mount Moriah, under Suleimon's Temple, beneath the earth, deep inside a dark, mystic cavern, there is a place of worship raised long ago to supernatural beings born at the Creation. It is a temple of the first religion--Kthon--the grave, a primal cult of blood, fire, birth, and death.

Cut from the mystic stone, great blocks soar ten times the height of a man, seem to float in torchlight, frescoes of human slaughter, bestiality, gods, and demons. Designed to last ten thousand years, it’s charmed architecture, lost technology.

A windy sigh emanates from deep cracks in the rock, mixed with the stony echo of human voices, a throng of hundreds. The richly dressed faithful are gathered for ritual, a jangle of gold jewelry, charms, bracelets, amulets, murmurs of fear and desirehumanity.

The high priest points at the throng of faithful, and says to his close-gathered agents, “There are infidels hidden here among the faithful in my house.”

Bach-cha-mut’s voice is resonant, beautiful to hear, that of a dark angel. Sweat beads on his shaved head, the narrow mane of black hair gathered in a knot, black armor, powerful limbs. He's adorned with mystic amulets, and an iron sword with grip wrapped in silver wire. He radiates, his presence is felt in the air before he is seen, a disquiet in the flow, he pushes the atmosphere ahead of him. Bach-cha-mut stares into each man. They're blooded killers, but they cringe.

He says, "Circulate.” His eyes flick from man to man. “Find me the unbelievers. Sacrifice them with fire, but I want them still alive when the god arrives. I want this conjure perfect. Find them, or it'll be you I roast, instead." Unspoken, he thinks, I don't care who you bring me, anyone will do.

For Bach-cha-mut, on the edge of the herd, whatever is not Bach-cha-mut is an abstraction. He takes or absorbs anything he desires. He obliterates anything that blocks or hinders him. He lacks fear and conscience. To him, good fortune is accident and disaster. He is desire. He is less priest than soldier, more sorcerer than wise man, and more murderer than anything else.

In the cavern, torches and oil lamps smoke and flicker. Burning pine resin curls in the air. Seated on a dais at one end of the huge room, a dark and stunning sorceress watches the proceedings, Anunitu, Pagan Queen of the Israelites. Her unguented body is adorned only in fine gold chains, beads, and the sheen of firelight. Her perfumed beauty is a magical veil.

 

 

 

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"No!" Anunitu says to a priest who pours her an infusion of black mushroom. She waves a dismissive hand, her eyes flare, "take it away. Get back, get away from me."

She's tense. She glances sideways at her husband the king beside her. Suleimon is three times her age. Addicted to black magic, shriveled and burned out by it, he's slumped in his gilded throne like a caged old crow with broken wings. Anunitu is troubled by the king's lethargy. A ruin, Suleimon is barely still a demigod, Anunitu is thinking, But what's left of him here tonight will do.

“Are you ready to bring the god through, my king,” she says. He doesn’t answer. She’s disquieted by his silence, but isn't surprised. He's grown more detached, drained by his inhuman appetites. She has given him the magic to say tonight, because only a demigod and true bloodline king of the House of Daoud can say the magic. Only he technically controls this ground and its demonic sway. She's thinking that he's necessary to the ritual, but only incidentally to her need.

Since before the great flood, Anunitu’s race has worshipped in this cavern, prayed to the Demon Queen Auriani--keeper of stone, fire, blood, and death. They prayed to Auriani for relief from life’s wheel, freedom from fear, what they desired most of all--immortality. They found a way. Anunitu was chosen before birth for this ritual. She would be consecrated as a sorceress, reared as a queen, and then, in her 20th year of life, she would unite with the demon king Asmodeus, die, and be reborn as Great Auriani. With the demon's magic, Anunitu, Auriani reborn, would burn impurity from the planet, bestow immortality upon the faithful of her subjects, and rule forever. Tonight is her night, here, in the cavern of Kthon.

She glances at the faithful, who await the ritual, the coming of Asmodeus. She slants a nervous glance to where the sacrifices are chained on iron grates over a volcanic crevasse, the Divine Hole Of Damgal Earth Mother. Asmodeus will be born there. He will enter this universe out of Damgal, from uncreation to creation, from non-existence to existence. He will be delivered here, from out of Death into Life.

Soon, Anunitu thinks, soon...

A fragrance rises from the excited throng, Anunitu wrings her hands, the smell of fear, and desire. She thinks, I swear by Asmodeus! By by every she-god and he-god between here and the Void. That my destiny will be fulfilled tonight, even need I rip it from the burning air with my bare fucking hands.

Her eyes are wild, she quietly rhymes a spell, "The ritual must not plod. Do it now, in this room. From his birth uncontrolled, hold back the god. And me—protect from doom."

A clatter of weapons--leather, the scrape of boots on stone, and Anunitu is surrounded by her guard. Bach-cha-mut leans in, the coldly handsome face close to hers.

“Queen,” he says, quietly, “what is it? What perturbs you?”

“Nothing,” she waves him off, doesn’t look at him, “Move back.”

She grimaces, “You're too close to me.”

Bach-cha-mut freezes. He’s been a lot closer than this. He steps back, face like iron. He straightens slowly, body like oiled granite, a dark, empty space around him.

Anunitu glares at him. "I said, get away from me. You’re too close.”

His eyes say, You never minded it all those times we fucked. He makes a small obeisance, "Yes, Queen," turns to go.

Her shout is a knife-edge, “Stop!"

He turns to her.

"Bow down, Priest."

Bach-cha-mut doesn't move. He gestures around, says, "This is my house."

"I am your queen."

"With respect, queen, I rule this temple."

"This temple is the State. I am governance."

"The State is Hebrew; our own great religion, this house, is Kthon." His brows lift, expose the black glitter of his eyes.

"All are melded in me, priest." Her eyes slide to the slow-roasting sacrifices stretched over Damgal. Her own handmaiden, Umayma-Het thrashes and groans there, chained flat to a grate over the fire.

Anunitu says, “Do you defy me, warlock? If you do, you're braver than your lover Umayma-Het. How do you like her now? She’s pregnant with your spawn. Is she therefore even more beautiful to you now? Do you love her now?”

Bach-cha-mut looks at the Queen, his eyes like holes in black ice. He glances at Umayma-Het, who is charred, peeled of skin, and  unrecognizable. He shrugs, “She was a mistake.”

Anunitu lifts her chin. She stares at him. She pitches her voice so only he can hear her, and says, “Am I also one of your mistakes?”

Bach-cha-mut glances at Suleimon, but the king seems in another place, detached. “No, of course not, queen.”

She tightens a spell around him, like the squeeze of a serpent, and says, "Would you like to join Umayma-Het over the fire?"

He tries a counter spell, but hers is more powerful. Shaken, he answers her, "No, queen, I would not like to join Umayma-Het."

Anunitu thrusts out her high breasts, rouged nipples like berries, and says, “Prostrate yourself before me.”

He hesitates, then sinks to one knee. He sits back on his booted heel, head down.

“No. I said prostrate yourself.”

He does not look at her. He takes his time, lays prone before her in the dust.

 She leaves him there, leveled out for the faithful to regard. Laying there, feeling all eyes on him, Bach-cha-mut opens a sluice in his mind, and floods it with cold displeasure.

Anunitu rises, moves in a hiss of beads and gold chain, and stands over the warlock. Only he can hear her, the intimate, personal tone, “I will ask you again now," she says, "my stallion: will you pledge yourself to me forever? To me alone, as my consort? Only then can you join with the god Asmodeus and his power, when we bring him through.” She glances across the cavern at the black idol of the god and then back to the priest.

Bach-cha-mut says, “No. I will not join you.”

Her eyes flare, she steps back, “Why not?”

“I will not be enslaved you.”

She glances at the king, but he's not paying attention, stares at the floor. She says to Bach-cha-mut, “Are you saying you won’t share in the god’s power? I can't believe it.”

Bach-cha-mut bites off each word, says, “I don’t share.”

The queen is on the edge of panic. She needs Bach-cha-mut's knowledge of black arts to bring the god through into this universe. Her hands flutter to her chest, “All right,” she says, “all right, warlock, keep to yourself then, but you will help me bring the god through.”

“That was our bargain, queen; and after that, I choose my own reward.”

Before the queen can speak, King Suleimon lifts his head, opens his glazed, yellow eyes wide, and says to no one, in a choked voice, “It's time.”

Anunitu startles, looks at the king and realizes he's finally gone mad, that his powers as a demigod are nearly gone.

"Who are you?" She says to Suleimon.

Slow, he turns to the sound of her voice. He stares at her, his eyes wide, and says, "I don't know; I was a king somewhere; I was  powerful as a wave on the sea; or, it was a dream." He looks around, "Where am I, child?"

Panicky, Anunitu whirls to Bach-cha-mut and says, “Get to your post, High Priest of Kthon, Asmodeus must be born now or not at all.”

The sorcerer is already on his feet, “Yes, Queen.” Bach-cha-mut looks at Suleimon and thinks, Hang on you demented, old bastard, you can't fail now, you owe me, nothing will stop me, I'd trade my soul for the power of Asmodeus.

Outside, above, in the black air over Jerusalem, in the cold sky, thunder breaks like a vast, dirty bottle and the divine storm pours down.

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